While Ocean Park is in the midst of a huge redevelopment plan, we wonder how they can manage to construct three hotels when they have difficulty in constructing a basic sentence.
Take a look at this on Ocean Park’s website:
Ocean Park's good-looking, badly written website
Strange that a corporation goes to so much trouble to design great looking graphics yet doesn’t even bother that the text is littered with PR fluff, screaming grammatical errors and general nonsense.
Though the whole site is littered with errors, we explain just three from the screenshot above:
1. Looking into Future: We seem to be missing a definite article here. This should read ‘Looking into the Future’
2. We’re pretty much lost for words on this. We just have two: meaningless babble.
3. We seem to be missing a verb here. Every complete sentence needs a subject and a verb. Not necessarily an object. We suggest ‘visit’. We also need a definite article: ‘It’s time to visit the new Ocean Park’ is better. Hardly enthralling copy, but at least it’s correct.
Mickey and friends, on the other hand, have no problems with the English language, even in Hong Kong.
It seems that they have read what you’ve written and updated the site accordingly.
Find this blog a good read. Hope to see it further when i have more time.